Hi Dustan, your draft makes it very clear for me what the programme is about and what it aims to achieve.
I have three issues (all audio).
1) The music you chose for the draft gives it a bit of a "infomercial" kind of feel. I was not charmed by it, but wouldn't know immediately what other music to recommend.
2) the part where the voice of the main character overlaps with another scene of him talking confuses me as it seems that he's out of sync with the audio. It was great seeing him (not talking but doing the excersize with the string) and hearing his voice, but the shot immediately after it makes for a weird effect.
3) Do you think you can get rid of the audio overdrive (or whatever it's called), there's a few ugly bumps in sound.